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@@ -1,6 +1,6 @@
 Title: Copyright Advice for Small Leagues
 
-There's enough in common that hacking sometimes feels like derby's big
+There's enough in common that hacking sometimes feels like roller derby's big
 brother, and watching derby struggle with copyright law makes me want
 to chime in with some hard-learned advice that computer nerds worked
 through in the 90s.
@@ -63,7 +63,7 @@ cheerfully tell ASCAP to get bent.)
 when you get a market economy person in a gift economy situation.  He's
 laying out his argument very reasonably, because there's nothing
 unreasonable about market economies.  But he's missing the point that
-(most) leagues are gift economies.  Read between the lines here:
+(most) leagues are gift economies.  There's another side to this story:
 those leagues are losing their photographer because, suddenly, he's
 demanding payment or increased gratitude.  I'll bet those leagues had
 a couple really long drawn-out meetings about this:  do the other
@@ -78,16 +78,27 @@ official, DJ, photographer, and software developer, to be paid too.
 Or, if I knew the full situation, I'd think that guy was
 being a jerk by extorting the poor league.  Butthurt!  Drama!
 
+On the flip side, certain professions—especially photographers—have a
+history of being bilked out of fair wages for their work by a stock
+set of excuses.  [Experience and
+recognition](http://static.happyplace.com/assets/images/2011/10/4e935baa48979.png)
+are *not* payment, and weaseling work out of people this way is
+dishonest at best.  There are plenty of ways a photographer can get
+experience and recognition that don't directly benefit your league. 
+If you sweet-talk a professional into doing unpaid work, you are
+sowing the seeds of butthurt and drama.
+
 
 What should you do about this?
 ------------------------------
 
 Small town leagues have no business entering into agreements with any
 artists unless the terms of that agreement are spelled out clearly in
-advance.  You need to be up front with all of your artists that you
+advance.  You need to be up front with all of your unpaid artists that you
 have no money and expect them to volunteer their time and skill for
 the love of the game and the gals who play it.
 
+
 Acknowledge that your league is a gift economy.  Embrace it!  You have
 nothing to give in return other than the community of your league, and
 you expect anyone entering that community not to start making demands. 
@@ -99,7 +110,9 @@ tape.
 
 Sure, the presentation is going to suffer when you get out-of-focus or
 poorly-framed photos, amateurish artwork, and web sites that look like
-Geocities in 1997.  But the skater-run, non-professional feel of small
+Geocities in 1997; or maybe you'll luck out and get [an awesome artist
+who loves the sport](https://secure.flickr.com/photos/nocklebeast/3715669736/).
+But the skater-run, non-professional feel of small
 town derby is one of its distinguishing characteristics, and makes
 fans feel connected to the team.  You want skaters who are doing it
 for the love of the game, why not ask the same of your other