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@@ -33,15 +33,23 @@ needing long-term medical attention and resulting in a roster reduction at futur
 
 0% of the dozens of games they have played against every other team
 (at least 8 teams) have resulted in a serious injury.
+In fairness, the Bombs have had one concussion in inter-league play,
+but it was caused by a player from their own team.
 
 I had already refused to NSO any game with the player named Big Red
 (formerly with Amarillo, now with Clovis),
 who caused the Bombs' first injury.
 Previously,
-the Las Cruces referee team and the Los Alamos head ref
+the Los Alamos head ref
 had also stated they would not participate in any game with her.
-I was not the first to do this,
-I may not be the last.
+
+Going into the July game,
+I didn't know much about the Clovis team,
+other than they were excited about having Big Red join them.
+Given her reputation,
+I was expecting something bad to happen at the bout.
+I was not surprised when I called a timeout to let
+the first aid crew tend to a Los Alamos skater screaming out in pain.
 
 
 
@@ -76,7 +84,7 @@ Making The Most of Time
 ![A M'Atom Bomb explains the game was called off due to rain](clovis-timing.png)
 
 We spent 22 minutes playing Roller Derby,
-20 minutes waiting for the rain to stop,
+20 minutes waiting for rain to stop,
 and 65 minutes in timeouts, official reviews, and bickering.
 
 We play outdoors, and have to cancel due to weather.
@@ -106,7 +114,7 @@ The second period was supposed to start at 7:45.
 I wasn't watching the clock at that point,
 but according to a friend, we didn't actually start until 8:15,
 30 minutes later.
-We spent those 30 minutes listening to skaters argue about
+We spent those 30 minutes listening to players argue about
 whether or not we should play the remaining 9 minutes on the first period.
 
 All told, the game ran 1 hour and 37 minutes, from 6:40 until 8:17.
@@ -115,9 +123,12 @@ Two 30-minute jams, a 20-minute halftime, and all 6 team timeouts
 would have taken
 1 hour and 29 minutes.
 
-Of course, we didn't know at the time that the rain would coincide exactly
+Of course, nobody knew that the rain would coincide exactly
 with when halftime was scheduled.
 But we did waste a tremendous amount of time standing around arguing.
+Anyone suggesting either team was conspiring with the weather to keep us from playing is crazy.
+I'm not making that claim.
+But I think it's important to understand *why* we didn't get to play.
 
 
 League Relations
@@ -196,7 +207,7 @@ In Closing
 ------------
 
 The perfect injury rate
-and the team's decision to support fans bad-mouthing us
+and the team's decision to support fans bad-mouthing the Bombs
 combine to make me feel completely justified
 in not officiating any more games with Clovis.